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Whāia te iti kahurangi ki te tūohu koe me he maunga teitei.

Aim for the highest cloud so that if you miss it, you will hit a lofty mountain.

Thursday, March 19, 2015

Writing: WALT share our voice

The group that have been focusing on sharing their personal voice and feelings in writing have been doing a wonderful job in writing descriptive paragraphs that paint a picture for the audience and make you feel like you are there.

Here are some examples...

A Creepy Night (By Madeline)

It was pitch black.  There was only one noise: footsteps.  I checked to see if my family was asleep, and they all were fast asleep.  The footsteps were getting louder.  I hid underneath my covers, with my body shaking and teeth clattering.  My heart was pounding like mad.  I heard the door open and I screamed!

First Day at School (by Brenna)

'It's okay, you can do it!'  I kept on telling myself that but it wasn't working.  My heart was thumping so loud I was scared that someone else would hear it, and my palms were sweating as I walked forward.  Then I took a step back.  Maybe I shouldn't go in?  But I knew I had to.  The cold wind blew on my face as I suddenly tripped on a stone and got mud all over me... but still I walked forward.

First Day at School (by Emma D)

This was it.  I was so excited.  I jumped in the car.  When we got there, fear started bubbling up.  My tummy had butterflies.  Mysisters ran happily to their classes.  Mum walked me in.  I was squeezing Mum's hand.  I was shivering because I was so scared.  The teacher tried to pull me away.  I started crying.  The teacher grabbed hold of me and pulled me away from mum and mum quickly left.  The teacher introduced me to everyone.  I started playing with the doll house and the blocks with Jack and Brianna.  

Mum came at the end of the day and I didn't want to leave!

New Holiday Destination (by Ava B)

As the car pulled up to the car park, I was so excited that we were finally there but I was also very tired... it had been a long trip.  It was in a nice small cabin in Taupo.  It was so cosy and snug.  Right next to it was a beautiful view of a massive playground and, as we drove in, we could see the biggest water park in Taupo.   

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